Model Study Reference (4 points)

Abstract (5 points); 

Introduction (15 points); 

Literature Review (24 points);

Methodology (32 points);

Pro Forma Budget 10 points); and 

Complete reference list (APA Guidelines format) (10 points)

Comment #

Corrections

Formatting Corrections

1

Missing or incomplete title page - Title page should have assignment title, student's name, class number and name, page number and date. APA, p. 30

2

Missing page numbers and/or running header - Pages should be numbered consecutively (top right hand corner). Beginning with the title page. APA, pp. 37 & 43

3

Missing headings. (Abstract; Introduction; Literature Review; Methodology, Budget, References)

4

Margins set at 1 inch (top, bottom, left and right)

5

All text should be left justified.

6

All font size should be 12 points

7

Indent the first line of every paragraph five spaces, EXCEPT the Abstract. APA pp. 45-46

8

Lines should be double spaced

9

Do not leave a blank line between paragraphs

10

Do not include any pictures, charts or graphs

11

A full or a minimum of ¾ of a page is required. See assignment guidelines.

Punctuation & Grammar Corrections

12

Do not capitalize

13

Capitalize all proper nouns and proper adjectives. APA pp. 165-170

14

Delete this word

15

Insert a comma

16

Insert a period

17

Misspelled word

18

Spell out all acronyms for the first use - Example National Park Service (NPS)

19

Too many spaces

20

Insert a space.

In-text Citations & Quotation Corrections

21

Need to cite a source for this statement/information.
Example: Outdoor recreation has continued to decline among specific ethnic groups over the past decade (Johnson, 2015). See APA, pp. 266-268

22

Incorrect in-text citation: the comma or period goes inside the quotation mark. 
Example: The best was the "creation story," from the tribal elder.

23

Incorrect in-text citation:
Correct example: Smith (2013) described the recreation program as well developed. 
Correct example: The study was conducted in a local park (Smith, 2013). See APA, pp. 266-268
Correct example: The Coconino National Forest User report (n.d.) described the recreation program as well developed. See APA, pp. 266-268
Correct example: In a recent study on aging skiers, no preference was shown for organized participation (Coconino National Forest, n.d.). (See APA, , pp. 266-268

24

Incorrect in-text citation: Works with no identifiable author: Cite the title and the year.
Example: (“Self-esteem in Adventure Participants,” 2018)

25

Incorrect in-text punctuation: The period goes after the citation. Example: The activity was based on backpacking skills (Smith, 2013).

26

Incorrect citation - multiple authors.
Two authors: Use the last name for both authors, a comma, then the year of publication.
Example: (Rogers & Cronin, 2019)

Three or more authors: For the first and subsequent uses, include the name of only the first author plus “et al.”

Example: The use of technology has had a significant impact on outdoor recreation activities (Smith, et al., 2020). See APA, pp. 266-268

27

For no author or date use the name of the title in quotation marks and the year of publication or if no year is given, use n.d. are inserted in the body of the text at the appropriate point.

No author (magazine)/ no date example: The visitor recreation program as well developed ("National Forest User's," n.d.). See APA Manual, p. 264-265.

28

This is the APA format for a direct quote (Smith, 2014, p. 6). Where are the quotation marks? If it is not a direct quote, then the citation should be (Smith, 2014).

29

Incorrect in-text quotation: Use quotation marks for a direct quote and cite the study at the end of the quote.
Example: "Outdoor recreation has declined among individuals over 60 years old" (Johnson, 2015, p. 3). or (Connor et al., 2022, p. 5). or (Johnson & Connor, 2021, p. 6)

Example: According to Johnson, "Outdoor recreation has declined among individuals over 60 years old" (2015, p. 3). or (2015, p. 3). APA, pp. 270-278.

30

Incorrect in-text quotation. Any quote with 40 or more words must be in a freestanding block of text and omit the quotation marks. APA, pp. 270-278.
Example:
In order to gather data, the authors searched databases, journals, and review articles published between 2010 and February 2013. The articles being searched, had these characteristics, findings specific to an after-school intervention in the school setting; subjects aged 18 years; an intervention component designed to promote physical activity; outcome measures of physical activity, related constructs, and/or physical fitness. Study outcomes were distilled into six domains: physical activity, physical fitness, body composition, blood lipids, psychosocial constructs, and sedentary activities. Effect sizes were calculated, within and across studies for each domain, separately. (Ross & Williams, 2013, para. 5) Or   (Ross & Williams, 2013, p. 12) Or (Connor, et al., p. 12)

References Corrections – (References are listed at the end of the paper)

31

Author last name, first initial, second initial. (year of publication). Title of article. Title of journal, volume number, issue number (in parentheses), page numbers, the digital object identifier (doi) or (url). The second/third lines are indented five spaces.
Example DOI: Journal with Author:     
Becker, L. A. (2019). The Complex and Dynamic Nature of Leisure Experience.
        Journal of Leisure Research, 26 (3), 2-6. https://doi.org/10.1235/rev0000126
Example URL: Journal with Multiple Author's:    
Stutter, T. A., Gruber, D., & Kale, G. (2019). Insights to Leisure.
         Journal of Leisure Science, 20 (1), 23-34. https://www.JLS.org/resoures
Works with no author. Use the name of the organization. year. title of the article. doi or url        
Example: Web Site:   
Wilderness Society. (n.d.). History of the Wilderness
      Act. https://do.org/10.1176/appi.books. 9875643224
Note: use n.d. if no date is available.

32

List ALL References in alphabetical order.

33

Missing a Reference list. References are required for ALL writing assignments.

34

Incorrect Reference list title. Use References, not Works Cited, Citations or Bibliography.

35

Incorrect reference format in the Reference List.  APA Guidelines or APA, pp. 298-309.
Two of the most common errors are:

Incorrect format:
Jones, G. (2015). Recreation Issues. Retrieved on April 23, 2016 from http://www.journal/outdoor/issues.htm 

Correct format:
Jones, G. (2015). Recreation Issues. 26 (3), 2-6. https://doi.org/10.1235/rev0000126

Incorrect format:
Jones, G., Smith, L. (2015). Recreation Issues. Retrieved from http://www.journal/outdoor/issues.htm 

Correct format:
Stutter, T. A., Gruber, D., & Kale, G. (2019). Insights to Leisure.
         Journal of Leisure Science, 20 (1), 23-34. https://www.JLS.org/resoures

36

Incorrect reference format in the Reference List. APA uses the author's first initial, not the first name.
Incorrect format:
Jones, George. (2015). Recreation Issues. Retrieved from http://www.journal/outdoor/issues.htm 

Correct format:
Becker, L. A. (2019). The Complex and Dynamic Nature of Leisure Experience.
        Journal of Leisure Research, 26 (3), 2-6. https://doi.org/10.1235/rev0000126
Incorrect reference format in the Reference List. APA uses does not use volume or issue.

Incorrect format:
Jones, G. (2015). Recreation Issues. Journal of Leisure Sciences, vol 1 issue (4), 34-39. Retrieved from http://www.journal/outdoor/issues.htm
 
Correct format:
Becker, L. A. (2019). The Complex and Dynamic Nature of Leisure Experience.
        Journal of Leisure Research, 26 (3), 2-6. https://doi.org/10.1235/rev0000126

37

Incorrect Reference format in the Reference list. Works with no author. Use the name of the organization. year. title of the article url        
Example: Web Site:   
Wilderness Society. (n.d.). History of the Wilderness
      Act. https://do.org/10.1176/appi.books. 9875643224
Note: use n.d. if no date is available.

38

Journal with no doi but url
Author last name, first initial, second initial. (year of publication). Title of article. Title of journal or magazine. the URL. The second/third lines are indented five spaces.
Correct format:
Example: Becker, L. A. ( 2013). The Complex and Dynamic Nature of Leisure Experience. Outdoor Magazine, https://www.outdoormagazine/spring/456

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40

If they "state or define," then cite as a direct quote. (

41

The textbook should be included in the References.

42

Missing research question(s) or hypothesis. (-3 points)

43

The Model Study reference MUST have a working link so the Model Study can be verified OR you MUST attach a copy of the complete Model Study article.
-2 points: If the link is not active and does not go to the Model Study article.
-4 points: If the Model Study is not at the beginning of the Research Proposal assignment.
-4 points: If there is no link or the web address is not correct.

44

Missing Payroll taxes line items or incorrect Payroll taxes amounts. (-5 points)

45

The Research Design is Pre-experimental since it is a covenience sample. ( -4 points)

46

The Research Design is Quasi-experimental since it is a random sample. ( -4 points)

47

It is Applied research since it is trying to solve a specific issue/problem. (-4 points)

48

The Data Collection Method is a survey. (-4 points)

49

This requires a specific and citable population. (-4 points)

50

The sample is either a convenience or random sample and a sample size is required. (-4 points)

51

There is no MOE for a convenience sample. (-4 points)

52

Incorrect MOE, See Margin of Error Table at the +/- 5%. (-4 points)

53

Since there is no control group or treatment group, it is not a True Experimental design.